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Melanie: You’ve razed how much again?
Susan: 58 thousand dollars and counting. I cannot express how much I want to thank you for making all this possible.
Melanie: No problem, Susan. It was the least I could do. If you ever want my help to do something like this again, don’t be afraid to give me a call. Anyway I’m sorry that I couldn’t stay for your guest band performing.
Susan: No worries, Mel. By the way, how’s your daughter doing? Sorry she didn’t win.
Melanie: Few bumps and bruises. Other than that, she’s fine. And don’t worry, she’ll get over it. Besides Vanessa isn’t the kind of girl who gets angry if she loses... only if that loss is not a humiliating one... kinda like one she couldn't do anything against her opponent, but that is rarely the case.
Susan: Well as long as she’s alright, that’s all it matters. Anyway I hate to cut our conversation short, but I need to practice my speech for the cause.
Melanie: You do that. I’m coming up to the hotel right now. I’ll be sure to ring you before I head home.
Susan: I’d appreciate it. Goodbye Mel and God bless.
Melanie: You too Sue.
*Melanie hangs up the phone*
They arrived to their destination. Melanie pays the driver as the others head inside the hotel. They soon made their way the restaurant area where Xenia and her friends are performing some karaoke to their parents. Including Flora Petridis who was unwell earlier was feeling much better. They were singing Black Magic by Little Mix. Duncan was at the bar section of the restaurant. Melanie spotted him.
Melanie: OK you three, listen up. I’m going to speak to Duncan Petridis over there. So I won’t be far. We’ll eat in 15 minutes. In the meantime, I want you to be on your best behaviour and go speak to them over there. And DON’T start any fights... or else. *evil grins with vampire teeth*
Vanessa, Karen & Eva: *gulps* Yes Coach Melanie.
Melanie makes her way to the bar while the girls watch the Delta Divas perform. Duncan then spots Melanie.
Duncan: Ah you made it. Been waiting for ya for 10 minutes.
Melanie: Glad you got my message. Where’s Hector? Is he not coming?
Hector: I’m right behind you, Miss.
*Hector arrives from behind*
Duncan: Hey there, Hector. Where the girls?
Hector: Lorena decided to stay for the rest of the event and Agata was so exhorted, she is currently taking a nap bless her. Anyway I believe you wanted to see me & Duncan about something?
Melanie: As a matter of fact, yes I do gentlemen. You see, I have a new fighter that I’m training. And I was wondering if I could have your fighters be a series of opponents for her to fight against? Of course your fighters may have the choice to decline, if they don’t want to.
Duncan: I don’t mind if Xenia wishes to help your new fighter.
Hector: Same here with Lorena. So tell us. What’s the name of your new fighter?
Melanie: Her name is...
Bartender: Excuse me. Would you like me to get you anything?
Melanie: Hold that thought. *Looks at the bartender* Yes, I think I’ll have a diet coke.
Duncan: Make that 2 diet cokes.
Hector: I’ll have a glass of milk, please?
*Melanie & Duncan looked at Hector in confusion*
Hector: My doctor told me that I need more calcium in my diet.
While the trainers get refreshment, Xenia and her friends finished performing. They got a round of applause for their singing.
Xenia: Hee hee hee! We still got it, girls. Excellent work.
Linda: You know, I think we should sing I’m Your Venus next time.
Xenia: Great idea.
Dagny: Um girls... We have company and I’m not talking about our parents.
They see Vanessa, Karen & Eva at the other side of the room. Both groups walk towards each other, then they split into different directions to speak to a member each.
Xenia: Hey there, Vanessa. I was hoping to run into you again sooner rather than later. You really gave me a run for my money in our fight. Sooooooo... no hard feelings?
Vanessa: None at all. You were a worthy adversary Xenia. I hope we’ll fight again someday.
Xenia: Me too. I would be more than happy to fight you again. Maybe next time, I’ll wear my main blue attire.
Linda: Oh my gosh! It’s really you! I knew you look familiar. You’re that famous fashion model Karen Martínez, right?
Karen: Well, I was a fulltime fashion model and my name was Karen Martínez. However I’m now a part-time model and a professional boxer. Also I’m now called Karen Mendoza nowadays.
Linda: I’m Linda Petridis and it’s such an honour to meet you. When I retire from my singing career, I dream of being a fashion designer. I would love to work with you on a fashion project together.
Karen: Wweeeeellll? Our coach has wanted to make training uniforms for us for quite awhile. But she’s been so busy; she hardly has the time to think about doing them.
Linda: Oh I’m more than happy to help you with that. I’ll make those uniforms for you and your friends in no time. Were gonna be the best of friends, you and I.
Karen: *nervous laugh* I can hardly wait.
Dagny: ...hey...
Eva: ...hey... I’m Eva.
Dagny: Dagny.
*12 seconds of awkward silence later*
Eva: Soooooo... you into skateboarding?
Dagny: I’m more of a rollerblading kinda girl really.
Eva: Care for a race sometime? My skateboarding skills against your rollerblading skills.
Dagny: I’m always up for a challenge.
Vanessa: I liked your singing by the way. You and your friends have talent.
Xenia: Cheers! Me and my friends use to have a career for singing as a pop group. My boxing nickname Delta Diva was the name of our group.
Vanessa: Then why did you swap your singing career for boxing?
???: Because she found out how much of a lousy singer she and her pathetic friends are!!
The voice came from behind them. It was the Moonlight Empress, Aysun LaCrescent. With a smug smile to boot.
Xenia: Aysun!
Vanessa: You know her?
Xenia: Know her? She’s the main reason that I’ve put my singing career on hold.
Aysun: We meet again, you Greek freak hybrid. *Looks at Vanessa* Oh and hello loser.
Xenia: What are you doing here!?
Aysun: Oh I was just passing by really. The hotel where me, my daddy & little brother are staying is just 4 miles from here. But then I smelt your filthy stench coming from here and thought to myself “Maybe I’ll give my rival a few more insults, before I head home tomorrow.” So here I am.
Xenia: You got a lot of nerve show up here.
Aysun: And you got a lot of nerve for simply existing.
Vanessa: Just ignore her, Xenia. She isn’t worth it.
Aysun: CAN IT LOSER! This doesn’t concern you. And by the way, you should be thanking me for helping you at the end of round 4.
Xenia: SO YOUR THE ONE WHO BLINDED ME AT THE END OF THAT ROUND!
Aysun: And would’ve done it again in the last round. No thanks to your friend, Battle Wolf.
Xenia: Battle... Wolf?
Vanessa: I see you’ve met Itzel. And for the record, Itzel & I are NOT exactly friends nowadays.
Aysun: Friend, foe, who cares? If she ever steps into the ring against me, I’ll show her a thing or 2 what happens when you mess with the Moonlight Empress.
Vanessa: You wouldn’t last for 3 rounds against her.
Aysun: At least I know I’m better than both of you combined amateur. You should know hybrid. Out of our 3 fights, I’ve won 2 of them.
Xenia: Um... our last fight was a draw.
Aysun: A DRAW IS STILL A WIN IN MY BOOK! The point is I’m superior to you. *Looks at Vanessa* As you amateur, let me offer you some helpful advice to ya... give up! After your performance against the Greek freak show here, you’ll NEVER become a professional fighter.
Vanessa: I’VE FOUGHT AGAINST 3 PROFESSIONAL FIGHTERS BEFORE FACING XENIA!
Aysun: And let me guess. You lost to all of them right? You’re fortunate that I’m not one of them. I would’ve made your bones as soft as a pillow and I wouldn’t give a crap if I end up putting you in a coma for the rest of your miserable life.
Karen: Hey b***h!
Xenia & Vanessa turned around and see their friends lined up in a row. They looked angry at Aysun.
Karen: Vanessa is more tougher that you think! She could knock your lights out if she wanted too!
Eva: But if you’re looking for some professional fighters to fight, then you’re looking at 2 who are willing to give you a beating!
Linda: Like Xenia once said to you when we’ve first met. When you mess with one Delta Diva, you mess with all 3 Delta Divas!
Dagny: Smooth move you Turk turd. You’ve really ticked all of us off!
Aysun: Oh great, more Greek and Mexican trash to deal with! Alright then, which one of you freaks of nature want a piece of me!?
*Vanessa, Eva & Karen suddenly froze in fear*
Aysun: HA! I knew it. You Mexicans are secretly afraid of me! What a bunch of wimps!
???: Oh there not afraid of you...
Aysun turned around to see where that voice came from. It was a furious Melanie Castillo. Now Aysun is suddenly frozen in fear as well at the mere sight of her.
Melanie: There afraid that I’m about to do this!
Melanie lands a super palm strike to Aysun’s face. Sending her flying n screaming through a big cake and then slammed against a wall. Aysun then falls to the ground, with a few wall plasters falling behind her.
Melanie: No one insults my fighters and gets unpunished for it! NO ONE!! *Looks at her fighters* Are you 3 alright?
Karen: Yes Coach and tha-
*Melanie bonks Vanessa, Eva & Karen in the back of their heads with her fist*
Vanessa, Karen & Eva: OOOWW!
Melanie: What did I just say about NOT starting any fights in here!?
Xenia: Aysun started it!
*Duncan bonks Xenia in the back of her head with his fist*
Xenia: OOOWW!
Duncan: She wasn’t asking for your opinion!
Aysun then got up from off the floor. Then she realises and was horrified at the state she was in. She was covered in cake on the front of her body and wall plaster dust on the back.
Aysun: AAAARRHH!! MY CLOTHES!! LOOK WHAT YOU’VE DONE TO MY CLOTHES!! YOU’VE RUINED THEM!! I HATE YOU PEOPLE!!!
Melanie: I’ll do far worse than ruin your clothes, if you don’t get out of my sight right this very minute!
Dagny: Well look on the bright side Aysun. At least you can still have your cake... AND EAT IT!
Both groups laughed at the joke as Aysun leaves the hotel, crying her eyes out. The hotel manager arrived and was very cross.
Hotel manager: Excuse me! But your actions have caused us a lot hassle towards our customers! Also, look what you’ve done to our wall!? Who’s going to pay for the damages around here!?
Melanie: Don’t worry sir. I’ll pay for the damage and I’ll have it fixed immediately.
By the snap of her fingers, Vanessa fixes the wall and cleaned the floor at the speed of sound. Xenia’s group and the hotel manager were awe strucked at the site of it. It’s as if the wall was never damaged at all.
Vanessa: Good as new!
Xenia & Linda: WOW!
Dagny: Mind blowing.
Hotel manager: Uuummm... thank you. That’ll be all. Consider your debt paid.
Xenia: I never knew you could do that.
Vanessa: Well I needed a second hobby at the gym. So I do stuff like this quite often.
Duncan: Well then. Now that’s done and dusted, I think it’s time we should eat.
Melanie: Alright girls. Let’s eat!
Xenia, Linda, Vanessa & Karen: ALRIGHT!
Eva: About time.
Dagny: I’m so hungry, I could eat a Trojan horse.
As 2 days past, both Xenia and Vanessa have bonded with each other and so have their friends. Although Dagny & Eva’s was rather questionable with their skateboarding n rollerblading races. Linda helped sketched some possible designs for the training uniforms with Karen. They may have found a winning design. Xenia shared a few boxing tips with Vanessa. In hopes that they may come in handy for her Pro Trials, including the peek-a-boo trick. Afterwards they would sing a bit of karaoke. Melanie spoke to both Lorena & Xenia what she already said to Hector & Duncan. They both agreed to help train with her newest fighter. On the 3rd day at the hotel, it was time for Vanessa & co to head home. But not with saying goodbye.
Melanie: Well Duncan, it was nice doing business with you.
Duncan: No problem. I’ll be sure to keep in touch. I’ll see you soon.
Melanie: Likewise. Tell Hector I said see you around.
Duncan: Sure thing.
Eva: Before I head home, we have one last order of business to attend to.
Dagny: Yeah yeah, I know...
*Dagny hands 70 bucks to Eva*
Dagny: But just remember, I’ve won the first and second races.
Eva: HA! Only because I’ve gotten a bit rusty with my skateboarding skills. But I do appreciate the exercise.
Dagny: If we ever meet again, I’ll be more than happy to race you again.
Eva: I’m down for that.
Karen: Thanks so much for your help on the training uniforms. I think Coach Melanie might approve these.
Linda: It was my pleasure. Anything for my model idol. So what are you going to do when you get home?
Karen: I’m gonna do some training for my rematch against Satori Sugami. Hopefully I’ll last longer than last time, maybe even win.
Linda: Well best of luck on that. I hope we’ll meet again someday.
Karen: Me too.
Vanessa: So I guess this is goodbye?
Xenia: Only for now. I’m gonna do some training for 2 upcoming official WWBEO fights. Then after that, me and Lorena have promised your mom that we’ll help train her newest fighter. But hey, don’t feel glum Vanessa. If I ever have any extra time, I’ll check up on ya and see how you doing. I wish you the best of luck with the rest of the Pro Trials. Show those other 3 boxers what you’re made of.
Vanessa: You got it. Thanks Xenia.
Xenia: By the way, I have something for you and your friends. It’s for the journey home.
*Xenia shows Vanessa a box full of melitinia cookies*
Vanessa: Ooohh cookies.
Xenia: Melitinia cookies to be exact. Dagny & I made them ourselves. Three for each of you. Try one.
*Vanessa tries one of the cookies*
Vanessa: WOW! There delicious!
Xenia: *giggles* Glad you like them.
A taxi minibus then arrived at the entrance of the hotel. It is there to take Melanie & her students to the airport.
Melanie: Well there’s our ride. Come on girls! Grab your belongings and get on!
Vanessa, Karen & Eva: Yes coach.
*Vanessa gives Xenia a hug*
Vanessa: See you again soon Xenia.
Xenia: Mind if I ask a quick question? Do you have boyfriend?
*Vanessa blushes*
Vanessa: Wweeeeellll... maybe?
Melanie: Vanessa! Get in the taxi or you’re running your way to the airport!
Vanessa: C-c-coming Coach! *Looks at Xenia* Goodbye Xenia!
Xenia: See you again soon Vanessa!
And so, Vanessa grabs her belongings and the box of cookies, then made her way to the taxi minibus. Once inside, Vanessa and her friends waved goodbye to Xenia and her friends outside the window. The taxi minibus drives off into the sunset as Xenia sheds a tear to her new found friend. However she knows that they’ll meet again someday. But that’s another story...
THE END!
Here’s the final part of the story at long last and boy did I had a challenge with this one.
Not to brag or anything but I think my biggest strength when it comes to writing stories might very well be the character interactions. While most of them like Vanessa, Xenia, Linda, Karen, Aysun and the trainers were pretty straight forward. Eva & Dagny’s was the biggest challenge.
I had a look at Eva’s profile and apparently she’s into skateboarding. So I went with that and gave Dagny an interest in rollerblading. Also I think I’ve made Dagny a Goth since her personality is that of Raven from the Teen Titans (Fuck TTG!) cartoon. Dagny Vlahos may very well be my favourite side character.
Next was Karen’s confusing surname. I’ve noticed in some of Cap’s work that her surname goes back and forth from Mendoza to Martínez and back again. So I PMed asking her official surname and it’s indeed Mendoza. But then I thought to myself “Maybe I can incorporate the other surname, to show she’s the same person.” So I came up with this... her surname used to be Martínez, but then her mother got remarried to someone else and now goes by the name Karen Mendoza. I hope Cap likes this idea. If not, I’ll edit the story. I was just experimenting with it.
Next I wanted to show how despicable Aysun LaCrescent can really be. She wasn’t going to be in this part of the story. But I later decided to add her in because...
1) I wanted to pad the story a little bit more.
2) I thought her losing the bet wasn’t getting her comeuppance enough.
3) Need an excuse to use something that Cap suggested, but I rejected it earlier.
4) To show what Vanessa & Xenia have in common. (I’ll get to that in a moment)
So I added her in, just to see her get physically punished by Melanie. Hope I’ve kept her in character enough. Speaking of which, her interacting with my OC trainers was a blast. I wanted to set things up for possible story ideas. It’s safe to say that Itzel will face off against Aysun at some point. So who is the newest fighter that Lorena & Xenia are gonna train/fight with? Is it Alina Suárez or a brand new OC altogether? I’ll let Cap decide on that.
By the way, if you’re wondering where’s Itzel? She in another hotel in another town. She pretty much served her purpose in the story. Now onto what Vanessa & Xenia have in common.
They both have cheerful personalities
They both hate bullies and are not afraid to stand up for themselves or for others
They both like singing
They both like hanging out with 2 friends
They are both kind-hearted and being optimistic
This story is a bit more comedic than my previous story from last year. Which isn’t a bad thing if it’s written well. Well that’s it for my story. Hope you’ve all enjoyed Beach Boxing Showdown. Just as much as or possibly more so than French Fight. I’ll see if I can try and write another story this year. But no promises on that’ll happen. I’ve more projects to work on. Anyway thank you for reading this story. I’ve had a blast writing it and hope I’ve inspired something out of this. I like to thank Captain Maverick letting me use his characters in the story & I hope I’ve done them justice. Until my next story, thanks for reading and I’ll see you again soon. Later folks!
EDITS AS OF 13/05/2017
Due to some new info on Karen from Cap himself, I’ve altered Karen’s sentence a bit.
EDITS as of 14/07/2017
Whoops! Forgot to have Vanessa to clean the floor too.
Also so far, Xenia and Aysun have fought 3 times (their first fight when they’ve first met doesn’t count) in official matches. Aysun won the first fight by KO in the 8th round of a 10 round fight; Xenia won the second fight by split decision and as Xenia mentioned, their last fight ended in a draw by judges decision.
EDITS as of 20/02/2021
Added in the hashtags to make my literary works more presentable.
Vanessa & Melanie Castillo, Eva Ramírez and Karen Mendoza belong to 
Xenia & Bahtiyar Yildizfield, Dagny, Rehor & Huberta Vlahos, Linda, Tapani, Flora & Duncan Petridis, Aysun LaCrescent, Hector Renza, Lorena DaConpez and Susan Reedman belong to me.
And I @ "female-boxing" am going to accept this it is a superb story.
It is a touching conclusion to this epic adventure, yeah, and Melanie sure taught Aysun a lesson she'll never forget.